Sydney Lang’s Essay Peer Review Response
English 110
Section C
11-13-17
Revision Plan for Essay #3
My Goal:
My goal for this essay is to focus my arguments and tie each and every paragraph back to the thesis to provide the essay with a sense of unity and solidarity throughout it. My goal is also to limit my use of summary through my essay, to prevent the frequency of excessively wordy paragraphs.
Plan:
My plan to attack these goals and achieve them is to break apart my essay into separate paragraphs and look at them as if they were to stand on their own. By doing this, I will be able to see if each paragraph relates and ties into the thesis enough that if I did not have the thesis itself within the paragraph, someone could still be able to figure out what I am arguing. To limit summary, I plan to highlight specifically where I am using summary and see the maximum amount that I can eliminate without losing clarity.
Obstacles:
The obstacles that I might face when I am trying to achieve my goal could include my tendency to over analyze, this specifically relating to the removal of summary resulting in the need to overcompensate in analysis as an attempt to limit confusion, when in all actuality it promotes confusion. A way of limiting this over analysis, I would need to go through my work and try to distinguish what is most vital to keep within my text, and what needs to be cut.
I like how you articulated your challenge. I think a lot of these surface “rules” are in place to help guide beginning students out of bad habits (in this case–writing a paper that is mostly summary). Try not to get too caught up on these “rules,” as it comes down to the argument you make and the choices that will best help you make it.