Sydney’s Architectural Draft:

English 110C

11-08-17

 

Working Thesis: Technology is negatively impacting the growing individual.

  • Claim 1- Technology negatively affects the individual emotionally
      • Evidence– social media can cause a sense of depression and as individuals are on it for extended and excessive periods of time they can become more susceptible to depression
      • Evidence– emotionally people can express their immaturities online and these later can cause individuals to feel regret for posting or commenting certain things when they did not really know that it will be there forever
      • Evidence- cyberbullying is a medium that anyone of any age can be targeted and attacked

 

 

  • Claim 2- Technology negatively affects the individual physically
    • Evidence– If people are constantly seeing what society says that they ‘should look a certain way’ this could cause harmful disorders including eating disorders (which are also psychological) or could cause the individual to be prompted and encouraged to alter themselves to ‘fit in better’
    • Evidence– If an individual is playing on their technology this can prevent them from doing other activities, such as playing physical sports, working out and keeping their body and heart healthy  
  • Claim 3- Technology negatively affects the individual financially
    • Evidence– technology can be used as a distraction preventing people from getting their tasks done, putting their job in jeopardy
    • Evidence– If the individual is always posting about their life when they young through adulthood, I know I do not think all of the same things that I thought when I was younger, this record could negatively impact the individual and prevent them from being hired by potential employers
  • Claim 4- Technology negatively affects the individual socially
    • Evidence– when a person is always communicating through a screen they can lose their ability to communicate person to person, which is a significant skill…being a person
    • Evidence– misinterpreted messages, can hurt relationships, as people are thinking their message says one thing but someone else interprets it differently
  • Claim 5- Technology negatively affects the individual intellectually
    • Evidence– Technology can help to offer a plethora of neverending information, but with that comes misinformation and fake news and that can be dangerous especially if an individual cannot establish the difference between the two
    • Evidence– the constant use of technology promotes frequent distraction as people are becoming acclimated to the frequent pop-ups, advertisements, etc.

 

Closing (new angle to revisit main idea with): Maybe it is a cultural change that is leading to this over involvement with technology, and maybe we need to change the age in which children are being exposed to technology until they can really understand the repercussions